Hi Steaven! I like that you wrote your thesis as a response to a specific question. Your sentence makes a solid (debatable) claim, which I look forward to hearing you defend in your essay! My only recommendation would be that you remove "In my opinion" for the sentence. Feel free to be bold and assertive when you write a thesis. Simply saying "Fahrenheit 451 is a cautionary tale to technology, which takes over our lives." makes your thesis much stronger.
Hi Steaven! I like that you wrote your thesis as a response to a specific question. Your sentence makes a solid (debatable) claim, which I look forward to hearing you defend in your essay! My only recommendation would be that you remove "In my opinion" for the sentence. Feel free to be bold and assertive when you write a thesis. Simply saying "Fahrenheit 451 is a cautionary tale to technology, which takes over our lives." makes your thesis much stronger.
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